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From the OWL resource Sentence Variety
For Repeated Subjects or Topics
Handling the same topic for several sentences can lead to repetitive sentences. When that happens, consider using these parts of speech to fix the problem.
1. Relative pronouns
Embed one sentence inside the other using a clause starting with one of the relative pronouns listed below.
which, who, whoever, whom, that,
whose
Example: Indiana used to be mainly
an agricultural state. It has recently attracted more industry.
Revision: Indiana, which used to be
mainly an agricultural state, has recently attracted more industry.
Example: One of the cameras was not
packed very well. It was damaged during the move.
Revision: The camera that was not
packed very well was damaged during the move.
Example: The experiment failed
because of Murphy's Law. This law states that if something can go wrong,
it will.
Revision: The experiment failed
because of Murphy's Law, which states that if something can go wrong, it
will.
Example: Doctor Ramirez specializes
in sports medicine. She helped my cousin recover from a basketball
injury.
Revision 1: Doctor Ramirez, who
specializes in sports medicine, helped my cousin recover from a basketball
injury.
Revision 2: Doctor Ramirez, whose
specialty is sports medicine, helped my cousin recover from a basketball
injury.
2. Participles
Eliminate a be verb (am, is, was, were, are) and substitute a participle:
Present participles end in -ing, for example:
speaking, carrying, wearing, dreaming.
Past participles usually end in -ed, -en, -d, -n,
or -t but can be irregular, for example: worried, eaten, saved, seen,
dealt, taught.
Example: Wei Xie was surprised to
get a phone call from his sister. He was happy to hear her voice
again.
Revision 1: Wei Xie, surprised to
get a phone call from his sister, was happy to hear her voice
again.
Revision 2: Surprised to get a phone
call from his sister, Wei Xie was happy to hear her voice again.
3. Prepositions
Turn a sentence into a prepositional phrase using one of the words below:
about, above, across, after, against, along,
among, around, as, behind, below, beneath, beside, between, by, despite,
down, during, except, for, from, in, inside, near, next to, of, off, on,
out, over, past, to, under, until, up, with
Example: The university has been
facing pressure to cut its budget. It has eliminated funding for important
programs. (two independent clauses)
Revision: Under pressure to cut its
budget, the university has eliminated funding for important programs.
(prepositional phrase, independent clause)
Example: Billy snuck a cookie from
the desert table. This was against his mother's wishes.
Revision: Against his mother's
wishes, Billy snuck a cookie from the desert table.